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The computer is widely used in education, and some people think teachers do not play important roles in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that modern technological advancements play a crucial role in
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education
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 field.
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 is a commonly held belief that tutors do not have a major role in the learning process. There is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that
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 modern technological advancements have a major role in
education
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, tutors remain essential for teaching.
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education
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 requires several effective methods, and these methods need specialists. It is
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 possible to say that
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 learning process can not be complete without tutors'
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contribution
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, modern widespread learning technologies require a developer to deal with
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, educators may contribute to developing these technologies. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that the academic process
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 both educators and educational technologies, in order to develop high-quality
education
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Give a more clear answer to the question. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this view all through the essay.
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Add one or two real and clear examples. This will make your ideas stronger and more full.
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Develop each main idea more. Right now, some points are too short and not fully explained.
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Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
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Link ideas in a more smooth way. Some sentences stop too fast and the next idea comes without enough support.
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Check paragraph unity. Each paragraph should have one main idea and a few supporting lines.
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You have a clear introduction and a clear conclusion.
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Your opinion is given in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
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The essay stays on the topic of teachers and technology in education.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology integration
  • pedagogical methods
  • digital literacy
  • personalized learning
  • instructional support
  • teacher-student interaction
  • critical thinking
  • emotional intelligence
  • educational tools
  • learning environment
  • interactive resources
  • collaborative learning
  • curriculum development
  • academic performance
  • educational equity
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