‘The best way to educate children is by using the Internet in every lesson.’ To what extent do you share this opinion? What other ways are there of making lessons effective for children?

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pupils to acquire knowledge effectively is still debated. Some people believe that remote learning and the use of technology are becoming increasingly important in

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others are still getting knowledge by going to school and meeting real teachers. In

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I will give my own perspective

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Jun 15, 2026

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Answer all parts of the task. You need to say how far you agree, and give other ways to make lessons work well for children.

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Give a clear main idea in this part. Now, you only say both sides will be discussed, but your own view is not clear yet.

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Add one or two simple examples to support your ideas. This will make your answer stronger.

coherence and cohesion

Use a more direct first sentence. The first line is a bit hard to follow.

coherence and cohesion

Link ideas more smoothly. For example, use words like 'also', 'however', and 'because' in a clear way.

coherence and cohesion

Be careful with repeated ideas. Try not to say the same point in two ways if it does not add new meaning.

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You clearly introduce the topic of Internet use and school learning.

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You show that there are two sides to this topic.

coherence and cohesion

Your paragraph has the role of an introduction, and it prepares the reader for the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

68 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

abundant source,
multimedia resources
reliance
misleading information
tactile learning
hands-on activities
critical thinking
problem-solving skills
interactive group activities
physical activity
outdoor learning experiences
child development
educational technology
interactive whiteboards
educational apps
virtual reality
digital literacy
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‘The best way to educate children is by using the Internet in every lesson.’ To what extent do you share this opinion? What other ways are there of making lessons effective for children?

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