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Write a 150 word letter to a family who are looking for some one to live with them and take care of six year old.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have come to know through a reliable source that you are looking for a person who could take care of your baby. I would like to offer my services as a caretaker of the child. I'm a qualified trainer in kids handling and
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 as a teacher for two years in a school. I think it is a tough responsibility to handle a six-years-old baby and only
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, I would like to explain that salary doesn't matter but the accommodation is. So It would be
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If you allowed me to live with you because without staying here It would not be
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 for me to do the job properly. I know that you are looking for someone who could not only take
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responsibility for your kid but
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. So no need to worry about it because you have chosen the right person. I hope you take a serious look at my request and accept my humble submission to select me as a caretaker of your child. I shall be very grateful for your kindness. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar
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Accuracy
Consider double-checking for spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity and professionalism.
Complexity
Using more varied sentence structures can add sophistication to your writing.
Development
Introduce more detailed examples or explanations to further support your qualifications and enthusiasm for the role.
Purpose
Clearly states the purpose of the letter.
Tone
Maintains a respectful and polite tone throughout the letter.
Structure
Well-organized paragraphs each with a clear focus.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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