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The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014 (in millions). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart
present
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presents
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 the amount of money which is given by an
orgnaisation
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organisation
 in three different majors of charity between a year of 2012
to
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and
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 2014.
Overall
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,
from
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apply
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the data
gives
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shows
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 that in six different types of charity, the social welfare is the highest
recieved
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received
.
By contrast
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, the art and the wildlife are samallest recieved.
However
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, in another three sections of
charity
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the charity
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 group are approximately remaining
in
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at
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 the
level
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same level
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as well as
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in
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apply
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every year. First of all, the social welfare was highest in 2012 and 2014 compared to
2013
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2013,
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 there is
35
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a 35
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thousand million
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billion
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 difference
by
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apply
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approximately.
Therefore
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, there are about 5 thousand million in
other
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the other
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 2
group
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groups
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 by approximately. The company
given
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has given
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donation
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donations
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 in public more than the art
adn
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and
 the wildlife
as a result
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.
On the other hand
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, during
in
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the
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 three years. What is more, Education, Health, and Environmant are recieved mostly
same
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the same
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 amount of
the
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apply
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money which
are
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is
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 given by
donaiton
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donations
 in the aftermath.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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