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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At that time, scientific
research
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 plays a vital role in education and technological advancements across the world. Some argue that it should
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 taken by
governments
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 rather than private companies.
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 from my own perscpective government oversight is necessary in all areas
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 I will outline my reasons in
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 with, there are numerous reasons why individuals rely on
governments
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carry
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 out
research
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.
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, scientific
research
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 ,
due to
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 its priority
say
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,
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requires time
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, money, and effort,
they are
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 considered that only
governments
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 can invest without limit in these fields.
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, scientific studies that are controlled by
governments
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giving
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 feelings
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 as trusted,
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moreover
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 using ethical methods during the process minimize risk of these
researchs
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studies
 being used for risky activities.
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, governmet led
research
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 ensures that scientific projects
prioritize
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 public over profit.
Governments
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 have a responsibility to
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invest
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 in areas
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 as space exploration
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 healthcare that can not be attractive to private companies.
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, many life-saving vaccines,
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 as
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 COVID-19,
these helpful vaccination
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 developed and
spread out
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distributed
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 to the community side from government.
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, the government controls and prevents dangerous experiments and situations for human safety. In conclusion, even though private companies have been allowed to do
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,
governments
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 should control and carry out major scientific
research
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.

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task response
Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in the first paragraph.
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Add one more clear idea about why government control is better, and explain it with a simple example.
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Your ideas are on topic, but some parts are too general. Make each main point more specific.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear paragraph plan: intro, one body paragraph for reason 1, one body paragraph for reason 2, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one. Some sentences now feel broken or hard to follow.
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You answer the topic and talk about both government and private companies.
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You give an example about COVID-19 vaccines, which helps support your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic linking words like firstly, secondly, moreover, and additionally.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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