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Writing Samples
Band 6

You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter: •Introduce yourself and your family. •Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find. •Give your preference for the location of the accommodation.

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Dear property agent, I am writing
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 letter as regards to buying a property with your agency, my name is jones and my family, We are called the Dicksons, I am looking at buying a property for my families accomodation within the city and i'm hoping your agency would assist me in getting with what my preferences are. We are a family of four and we are looking at getting a three bedroom apartment, which should have a large garden area, ensuite toilets for the masters bedroom and
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 extra bathrooms which could serve as a guest toilet. We are looking at getting a house with good proximity to a bus station or tram service and a walkable distance to the city centre area
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 I hope we are able to get something with our preferences. We would be very delighted to book an inspection if anything comes up. Thank you very much
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 look forward to hearing from you
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. Warm Regards, Dickson Family

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas are not clear. Say who will live in the house in a simple way.
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Task response: Use a more direct tone. Ask for the house and give your needs in short lines.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in one part. First family, then house, then place.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use full stops more. Some lines are too long and hard to follow.
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Task response: You include your family size, house type, and place needs.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening and ending.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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