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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

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The line graph indicates the number of
wheat
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exports
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 in Australia , Canada and the European Community over the
period
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 of 5 years from 1985 to 1990 As the graph shows
that
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,
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wheat
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exports
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 of all 3 countries fluctuated over the
period
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. Specifically,
wheat
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exports
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 of Canada showed no significant change, with periods of variation.
While
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 the European community experienced a rocket, Australia witnessed a considerable decline over the
period
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. In terms of the number of
wheat
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exports
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 in EC, there was a slight drop from around 17
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million tons in
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 1985 to under 15 millions of tones. The data experienced a slow increase of 2
million
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 between 1986 and 1988. During the
period
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 from 1988 to 1990, there was a significant growth of approximately 5
million
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.The Canadian data of
wheat
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 exprots plunge modaraly amout 3 milions form 1985 to 1986,
then
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 rise sharp around 25
million
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 to peak in 1988. From 1988 to 1989,
wheat
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 export experianced go down rapidly from 25 to under 15
million
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 tons. There was a significant growth in
wheat
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 export between 1989 and 1990 from under 15 to under 20
million
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 units.
It is clear that
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In
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in
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 Australia, the figure for
wheat
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exports
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 increased slightly by around 2
millions
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million
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 from 1985 to 1986,
then
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 there was a considerable decrease from over 15 to around 10
million
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 over a
period
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 of 4 years between 1986 and 1990. In Canada,
wheat
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exports
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 increased considerably throughout the
period
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. The experience
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ranged
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 from about 19
million
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tonnes
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 in 1985 to 17
million
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tonnes
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 in 1986 before rising steadily to a peak of approximately 25
million
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tonnes
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 in 1988.
However
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,
exports
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then
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 dropped sharply to around 14
million
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tonnes
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 in 1989. There was a plunge from 14 in 1989 to 1990

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, exports, period, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plunge" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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