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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.

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The map
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the development which tool a place in the
city
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 of Nelson from 2000 till present.
Overall
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, a comparison between
tow
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two
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 maps
show
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shows
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 a
completed transform
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complete transformation
 from a rural
city
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 to
urban
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an urban
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 area.
Furthermore
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, there are huge facilities has been built
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such
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apply
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as a result
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. In the year 2000, the town was
more
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apply
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greener and lagre of space
,
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.
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 There were individual train
station
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stations
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,
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city
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a city
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centre
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, and
old
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an old
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martv
Correct your spelling
market
 within a main road for transportation.
Moreover
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, there was a University which is beside trees.
On the other hand
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,
developed Nelson
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Nelson city has developed
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city
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 in nowadays.
Modern
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The modern
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 train station has been moved to
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centre
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the centre
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while
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city
Correct article usage
the city
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centre
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become
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has become
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bike
Correct article usage
a bike
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 rental.
Therefore
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,
new
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a new
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 shopping cntre replace on trees spot in the meantime hall of residence has been built next to A University.
In contrast
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,
University
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universities
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 are
conected
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connected
 by tram between
city
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centre
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
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,
new
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a new
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 restaurant and bar on the
otherside
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other side
 of
tyhe
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the
 road, and
road
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the road
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become
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becomes
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 a
footpart
Correct your spelling
footpath
 for people.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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