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The pie chart illustrates the average
of
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household
which is expending
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expenditure
between 2019 and 2020.
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, from the information
that
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given
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, the
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largest section is
food
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the food
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industry follow by
housing
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the housing
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sectment
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sector
.
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, the smallest is education and healthcare.
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,
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everythings are changing and expending it has been
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as a result
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.
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with, in 2019 the largest section is food
which
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is standing at 55 per
cent
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, and
follow
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followed
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by housing
which
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, which
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is stood
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stands
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at 20 per
cent
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form
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for
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all the family
member
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members
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.
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, in three groups which are education, other
product
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products
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and service
then
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healthcare are standing among 5 - 13 per
cent
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.
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,
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in 2020
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2020
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2020,
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the largest still
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food
but
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, but
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it decreased
14
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per
cent
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.
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, healthcare and other
product
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products
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and service are have been
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contributing
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, both of these have been
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encouraging
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17 per
cent
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approximately.
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, education
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was extremely
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lost
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low
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in
contributed
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contributions
from all
sectioins
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sections
of
houshold
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households
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, there was only 2 per
cent
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in
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at
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the end of
period
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the period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average spending
  • household expenditure
  • compare
  • increase
  • decrease
  • rise
  • fall
  • higher than
  • lower than
  • the largest part
  • the smallest part
  • in 2019
  • in 2020
  • spent more on
  • spent less on
  • changed over time
  • similar
  • different
  • clear trend
  • overall
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