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The bar chart shows the share of poverty of the rural areas in the years 1993 and 2002. The pie chart shows the rural area share and the urban area share of poverty in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart here compares the
poverty
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 in rural areas of 6 different regions around the world in the years 1993 and 2002,
while
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 the pie chart illustrates the
portion
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proportion
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 in rural and urban areas in 2002.
Overall
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, it can be deduced that in East Asia and
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the Pacific
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Pacific
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Pacific,
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 no change has happened and the
poverty
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 remained static.
Furthermore
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,
pie
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the pie
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 chart clearly indicates that rural
accounted
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areas accounted
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 for
highest
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the highest
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 share
in
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of
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poverty
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 .
To begin
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, for both
the
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apply
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years, East
asia
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Asia
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 and pacific had an approximate share of 80%. Europe and
central asia
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Central Asia
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 showed a jump in
poverty
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 at 65% in 2002 as compared to previous 50% in 1993. For the rest of the areas, a steady decline can be observed from 1993 to 2002. The most surprising figures come from Latin America and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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with
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, with
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 almost a 10 % decline at 40%. On a closer look at the pie, it is evident that
Rural
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rural areas
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 made up for more than 3/4 of the
poverty
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 as compared to urban
, which
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areas, which
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 stood at 24%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty rate
  • rural areas
  • urban areas
  • percentage share
  • comparison
  • significant change
  • economic factors
  • government policies
  • social changes
  • disparities
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • analyze
  • illustrate
  • implications
  • distribute
  • sector
  • trends
  • overview
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