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The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the current layout of the Islip town centre and its proposed future development.
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, the area is expected to undergo significant redevelopment, becoming more residential and service-oriented. The most noticeable changes are the development of roads,
houses
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, a bus station, a car park, and a shopping centre. In the current layout, shops are located on the northern side.
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 the proposed plan, they will be replaced by a car park, a shopping centre, new
houses
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, and a bus station.
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, pedestrains path and new
houses
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 are expected to be introduced in the area.
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 to the northern side, the southern side is expected to witness fewer changes. The school will remain unchanged,
while
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 the park will be reduced in size.
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,
houses
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 are expected to be built near the school, suggesting a shift towards a more residential and family-friendly environment.
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, roads are expected to be extended and new ones constructed.

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