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The violence portrayed on T.V and in the movies leads to an increase in crime in our society. People who watch violent movies are more likely to become criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

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Answer the topic more clearly. Say if you agree or disagree in the first lines.
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Write full ideas, not the same line many times. Add 2 or 3 main points.
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Give one real or clear example to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: introduction, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, because, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat the same sentence. Each sentence should add a new idea.
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You wrote about the right general topic: violence on TV.
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You tried to give an opinion: violence will decrease.
coherence and cohesion
The writing is very short and easy to follow at sentence level.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitization
  • aggressive behavior
  • copycat phenomenon
  • normalize aggression
  • propensity
  • psychological impact
  • critical thinking
  • vulnerable individuals
  • regulatory bodies
  • mitigated
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