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In recent years, reading e-books has become increasingly popular. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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In recent times, it has become increasingly common for
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 to read e-
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While
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this
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 trend presents certain benefits, it is not without its drawbacks. One of the main advantages of reading
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 online is their portability.
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 is especially helpful for students and those who like to read
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 almost everywhere. Take
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 or in cafés, many
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 in Japan can be seen reading on their phones or tablets.
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, no one needs to carry heavy
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 in their backpacks. They simply download a
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carry only their phones. Another benefit is that e-
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 are cheaper than printed
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. When
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 go to the bookshop, they may find that printed
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 have a higher price than those which are available at online libraries.
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, sometimes e-
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 are not only cheap, but
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 free.
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, on Google's official bookstore, there are many
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 that are both famous and don't charge any money.
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 app's
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 have more readers than the physical
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 do.
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,
this
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 trend
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 brings several problems. One major disadvantage is the harm it may cause to
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's eyesight. Spending hours looking at the screens of our phones or tablets can lead to eye strain and vision problems. In most cases,
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 has a cure , but not everyone can afford the medical process it takes. Another drawback is the constant distraction.
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 cannot fully concentrate on the
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 because they get push notifications every minute. When the new notification appears at the top of the screen, the reader's focus will go to the message, not to the
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 he or she is currently reading.
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 disadvantage is the reason why some
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 still choose a physical
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 to read. In conclusion,
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 reading
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 online offers certain benefits
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 as portability and cost effectiveness, there are
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 several drawbacks to
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 trend, including vision problems and irritation.

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