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Band 3.5

Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
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 around the world are locked in strict
rules
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 and
laws
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. It might not work if the
rules
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 disappear. In my opinion, I totally agree, as the
rules
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 make the non-honour
people
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 from stealing, and most
people
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 might inherit someone without a good reason if there are no
rules
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. lets imagin if the
rules
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 disappear one day; most studies show that every person has bad thoughts sometimes,
for example
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, seeing a car open without anyone inside, more than 80% of
people
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 think of stealing the vehicle.
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, their hasitates by thinking of the consequences. The world has to build a strong base of
laws
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. Without
laws
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, society will
wach
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witness
 a lack in the humaniy. An interesting study, but a woman in a room and tell her not to move for any reason. And a random guys inter the room and they can do anything with the woman.
spraysly
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, after 4 hours, they start hurting the woman without a logical reason.
To sum up
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,
rules
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 and
laws
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 are stopping the world from becoming a mess as they have a hesitation from stealing and a big fear of going to jail and giveing the human some humanity.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly why you agree, and keep this idea strong in all parts.
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Add one more clear main idea. Now your ideas are simple, but not fully explained.
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Use examples that are easy to believe and explain them step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph have one main point only.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple way, like first, also, for example, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts now feel sudden or unclear.
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You gave a clear opinion in the introduction.
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You stayed on the topic of rules and laws.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body, and conclusion.
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You tried to use examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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