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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadaysthan in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that there is an increasing tendency for
people
 to have a single life compared with the past. Personally, I believe that living alone can be both positive and negative. On the one hand, there are some benefits for
people
 living alone, where the primary advantage is the reduction in household expenses. It means that it is unnecessary for a single person to support the whole family's consumption, which usually includes the costs of baby care, children's education and so on.
Secondly
, living alone is conducive to fostering a sense of independence in young
people
 because they are supposed to complete things without help from others.
For example
, there are usually some household chores,
such
 as doing the laundry and cleaning the house.
Therefore
,
people
 choosing to live alone can benefit from lower life stress
as well as
 personal growth.
On the other hand
,
people
 living alone will lead to negative impacts from both personal and social perspectives. From a personal aspect, those
people
 are more likely to undergo psychological illness since they lack sufficient daily interaction with
people
 and opportunities to share their feelings with friends. In terms of social aspects, an increase in the percentage of those
people
 probably results in uncertainty in society.
This
 is because they tend to rent a flat or house, which contributes to the higher frequency of changing their address and difficulties of security regulation. In conclusion,
while
this
 development of increasing the percentage of living alone has various benefits, I hold the view that there exists a great deal of negative influence as well.
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Ensure that your introduction clearly presents the topic and your viewpoint, without unnecessary repetition or overly general statements.
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coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and topic-specific vocabulary to strengthen the logical flow of ideas and to showcase a more sophisticated command of language.
coherence cohesion
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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