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Nowadays pollution and waste levels are increasing rapidly impact on both the individuals and society? To what extent do you agree?

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Today, People are affected by the
pollution
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 and waste, which are rising excessively. I strongly agree with
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 statement because of the high
levels
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 of consumption in
society
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. The
society
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 is using a lot of resources, which are not biodegradable,
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 as plastic.
This
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 material is pretty popular in
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 recent generation. Many products are packaged in paper to avoid germs or airborne bacteria.
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,
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 material finishes at the rivers or water ecosystems, bringing a lot of contamination.
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, in Japan, a lot of fruits
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 as oranges and bananas are covered with plastic paper, and when these are bought, they get plastic paper to take them home.
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 practice creates a negative impact on the planet's conservation, directly affecting
society
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.
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, the
levels
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 of
pollution
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 are rapidly impacting
society
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due to
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 the
levels
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 of CO2 emitted by the use of
cars
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 and industries.
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 there are electric
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, most
cars
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 in big cities run mainly on petrol, which impacts air quality. China is a clear example; the number of
cars
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, especially at peak hours, is affecting the quality of the air, obligating people to use a face mask to protect themselves.
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, I believe that
pollution
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 impacts the lifestyle of people around them. In conclusion, I think the waste and
pollution
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 are increasing drastically, creating significant impacts on
society
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.
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 can be evidenced in the use of non-biodegradable resources and the high
levels
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 of CO2 in big cities.

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task response
Answer all parts of the task more clearly. You agree, but say more about how both people and society are affected.
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Use more clear ideas in each body paragraph. Make one main point, then explain it step by step.
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Give examples with more detail. Your Japan and China examples are good, but they need a little more support.
coherence and cohesion
Make links between ideas smoother. Some sentences jump too fast from one point to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraph focus more carefully. Keep one paragraph for waste and one for air pollution, with clear topic sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Check reference words like 'this', 'these', and 'which' so the reader always knows what they mean.
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You clearly show your opinion from the start and keep it the same through the essay.
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You answer the main question and talk about both waste and pollution.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Main ideas are easy to follow in general, especially the change from waste to air pollution.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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