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International travel is becoming cheaper and more and more countries are opening doors for it. Does the advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

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Is international
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travel
 being cheaper
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having more advantages
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advantages
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 more than
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disadvantages
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 actually has
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advantages more
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more advantages than disadvantages
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. In the first hand, international travels has more
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 because more than half of the
people
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 in society do not own that much of money for paying expensive tickets for traveling and may anyone say that traveling is not that important for poor
people
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 beacuse they think that
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 wants to
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 to have fun only but the honest most of the
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 want to
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 to study and get upgraded ,or there is some
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 travels for doing practical.
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other
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traveling
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travelling
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 being cheaper could have disadvantages
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for
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alot
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a lot
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peaple
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people
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travel
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 to do things there own country
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 because
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it's
 harmful for them
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 they want to
travel
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 to do it .
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overall
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,
traveling
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travelling
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 becomes cheaper has more
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 because the percentage of normal
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people
 is way big that
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of rich
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 the company of the airlines will get more profits.

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Answer the full question more clearly. Say why the good side is stronger than the bad side.
coherence and cohesion
Give one clear main idea in each body part.
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Use simple examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, however, and overall.
coherence and cohesion
Write shorter sentences so your meaning is easier to follow.
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Explain the bad side more, not only the good side.
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You answered the question and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
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You tried to compare both sides.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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