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Band 2

More and more people are choosing to study abroad for their university degree. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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many
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, many
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 people
choosing
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choose to
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study
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 abroad. They go to another country for university. I think it has good
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things
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 and bad
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things
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. But
good
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the good
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 thing is
more big
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bigger
. First of all,
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study
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studying
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 in
other
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another
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 country is very good. Because
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student
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students
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 can learn
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 well.
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 is very important
nowdays
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nowadays
. If they speak
english
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 good, they can get
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 job.
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, they can make many foreign friends. It is very fun. They play together and learn
culture
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about culture
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.
Second,
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study
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studying
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 abroad is very expensive. Cost much money. Parents give a lot of money to
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student
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students
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,
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student
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students
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 live alone in
other
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another
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 country. They miss mother and father.
Sometime
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 they cry. Food is not
same
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the same
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, so they can not eat well. It is
very
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 hard time for
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student
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students
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. In
conclude
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conclusion
,
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study
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studying
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 abroad have advantage and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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Advantage
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The advantage
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 is learn language and make friend.
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A disadvantage
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 is expensive money and sad. But I think advantage outweigh disadvantage because
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 is most important for
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the future
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task response
For task response, answer the question more fully. Say clearly why the good points are stronger than the bad points.
task response
For task response, add one more clear example for each main point, like jobs, study, or daily life.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, make each body paragraph have one main idea only, then add two supporting lines.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, use easy link words like first, also, however, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, check sentence order so each idea follows the last idea in a smooth way.
task response
You answer both sides and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your main ideas are easy to see: language, friends, cost, and homesick.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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