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: The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph shows the information about the
price
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 of
bananas
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 in four countries between 1994 and 2004.
the
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The
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 figures are given as a us dallors that spent per
killogram
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kilogram
.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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japan
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Japan
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 got the highest
price
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wheares
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, wheares
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 united states got the lowest
price
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 in almost the whole period. Another
noticable
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noticeable
 point , by
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year
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the year
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 2001 thw
price
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 of
bananas
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 in
japan
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 has been decreased sharply
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while
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, while
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 the
price
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 of
bananas
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were
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had
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 increased strongly in
france
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France
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. IN the beginning ,
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japan
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Japan
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 got the highest
price
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in the
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for
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 most of the period .
In addition
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,
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japan
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Japan
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 rose
the
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to the
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 highest
price
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which
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, which
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 is 2,75 us dollars
by
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, by
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1995
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1995,
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by the time
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when
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 the
price
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 decreased
by
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in
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year
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 1996 to
became
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become
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 2
us
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US
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 dollars . Regarding the
remining
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remaining
 information,
USA
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the USA
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 got the lowest
price
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 in
the
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apply
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most of the
year
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; however
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however
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however,
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 by
2003
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2003,
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 france
bananas
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price
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 decreased
dromaticly
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dramatically
 to
became
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become
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 the lowest
price
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 by the
year
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 2003 .
Moreover
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 , france
bananas
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price
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 rose
againe
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again
. In the
last
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 ,
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japan
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Japan
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 got the highest
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bananas
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banana
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price
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in the
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for
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 most of the
year
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while
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, while
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 usa got the lowest
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bananas
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banana
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price
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in the
Change preposition
for
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 most of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, bananas, japan, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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