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Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: . say why a driving licence is advantageous . recommend a driving school . give any extra guidance/tips You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ... ,

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Dear Vlad, I am glad that you would like to join a driving school in the next
months
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few months
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. I would like to answer your questions about everything you need to know. So, the best advantage
I
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, I
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think
it
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,
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 is that once you get your driving license, you can drive anywhere you want and sometimes
helping
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help
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 your family by driving to a certain location. One of the
est
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best
 schools in the city is ForSaj in the remote area of the city because it is cheaper and the teachers really try to teach you everything you need to know.
Lastly
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, I will give you some tips about achieving your goal: 1. You must work independently; 2. Don't do online lessons and watch any tutorial on
Youtube
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YouTube
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; 3. Always be calm and patient. I hope next time when we will see each other
you
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, you
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 will have
you
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your
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 driving license and we could drive around. Sincerely, Your friend
lon
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Lon
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.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas need more support and clearer detail.
task response
Task response: Use a more natural friendly tone in some lines, and check small word choice problems.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, but some sentences are too long.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put each main idea in its own paragraph and link ideas with simple words like also, because, and so.
task response
Task response: You cover the three points in the task.
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Task response: You give real tips to your friend, which fits the purpose of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are both clear and correct for a letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order of ideas is easy to follow most of the time.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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