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The bar chart below shows the number of films produced of five countries in three years

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The bar chart gives information on the
number
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 of
films
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 produced
of
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 five countries in three years.
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, it is evident that
country
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 A produced a significant
number
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 of
films
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 in three years, followed by
country
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 B,
while
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 countries C, D and E produced a few
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films
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 over the period.
Country
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 A registered the highest
number
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 of
films
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 at around 87 equally in both 2007 and 2008,
whereas
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 it had experienced a slight reduction, reaching 80 in 2009.
Country
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 B was the second
country
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, which produced 50
films
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 in 2007.
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, the
number
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 of
films
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 increased moderately to about 52 in 2008 before sharply increasing to 70 in 2009.
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,
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 C generated around 8
films
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 in 2007 and
then
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 sharply rose to about 12
films
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 in 2008 after reaching roughly 18
films
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.
Country
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 E
also
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 showed
similar
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 pattern,
which
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 the
number
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 of
films
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 gradually rose from around 9 to 11 between 2007 and 2009.
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, the
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 of
films
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 produced by
country
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 D significantly reduced, falling from approximately 15 in 2007 to 9 in 2008 before recovering, reaching around 12 in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, films, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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