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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts illustrate the percentage of
households
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 that owned three electrical appliances and the average number of
hours
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 of housework completed per household each week in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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,
ownership
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 of all three household appliances increased over the period, with refrigerators and vacuum cleaners becoming almost universal by the end of the timeframe. Meanwhile, the amount of time spent on housework declined dramatically. In 1920, washing machines were the most common appliance, being owned by approximately 40% of
households
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,
whereas
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 only around 30% had a vacuum cleaner
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 almost none possessed a refrigerator. Over the following decades, refrigerator
ownership
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 rose sharply, reaching 90% in 1960 before achieving full
ownership
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 in 1980.
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, the proportion of
households
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 with a vacuum cleaner increased steadily from 30% to 100% by 2000.
By comparison
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, washing machine
ownership
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 grew more gradually, rising to 70% in 1960, falling slightly in 1980, and
then
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 recovering to approximately 75% by the end of the period. Turning to the second chart,
households
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 spent around 50
hours
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 per week on housework in 1920.
This
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 figure fell significantly to 20
hours
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 by 1960 and
then
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 continued to decline at a slower rate, reaching approximately 10
hours
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 per week in 2019.
This
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 downward trend coincided with the increasing
ownership
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 of household appliances.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, hours, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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