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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 for a big enterprise or a small one is a significant concern for many recruiters.
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 believe that working in a large company is more beneficial than in a small one. I do firmly agree with
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 statement, and in
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 as having tremendous career development and providing attractive
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 staff benefits. On the one hand, the small business can be an effective place for expressing opinion of employees, who do not have to wait for lengthy superiors' orders.
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, when I worked as an Accountant in a small finance company in Singapore, I could promptly decide most financial cases in solving the customer complaints without acquiring the acknowledgement of directors except my superior project manager.
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, within the small team, employees can perform faster with a reduction in the stress of jobs assigned.
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, the big organisation can promote more professional
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, and offer more varied benefits.
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, when I used to
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 as a Treasury Assistant in the Manufacturing Industry, I could have worked
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 other skilled
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 to help me upgrade my
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 status.
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 a big industry was so well-organised that I could comfortably learn a lot of job tasks with the help of advanced technologies
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 as the SAP software training.
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, it led me to be promoted to Treasury Officer in a short period.
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 provided me with lots of facilities
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 as ferry transportation, staff catering, excursions, training, and health insurance. Apparently, huge companies can only have
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 some argue that small companies are better for personal suggestions, I strongly believe that the larger the companies
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 join, the more continuous improvement leads to their lives.

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Score: 6. Your answer is clear and stays on the topic. However, the small-company paragraph is quite strong, so it can make the reader think you partly agree with both sides. Make it clear that these good points are less important than the good points of large companies.
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Explain each main point more. For example, say how training, skilled workers, and promotion can help a worker in the long term.
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Your final sentence is not fully clear. Instead, write: “I believe large companies are better because they offer better training, career growth, and staff benefits.”
coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. The order of ideas is easy to follow, but some sentences are too long and hard to read. Use shorter sentences with one main idea in each.
coherence and cohesion
Some links between ideas are not clear. For example, after the small-company paragraph, add a sentence such as: “However, these benefits are often less useful than the career chances in a large company.”
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same words for the two sides: use “small company” and “large company”. Do not change them too often to “business”, “enterprise”, “organisation”, or “industry”.
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You give a clear view: you agree that large companies are better.
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You use two real work examples. This makes your ideas more real and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end.
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You use linking words such as “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “For example”, and “In addition”.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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