The table below gives information about the amount of beef exported in five different countries in 2011, 2014 and 2016.

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The table provides details on total beef exported in several countries, which are Japan, Switzerland, Brazil, Norway, and Uruguay in 2011, 2014, and 2016. Most countries had an upward trend, except for Norway. The highest beef foreign trader is Brazil, which sold around 125k
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in 2012,
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increased to 137k
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in the next 2 years. Below it is Uruguay
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started high at 44k in
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dropped to 39k and
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rose again to 42k. The third position is Japan, which has a huge gap with the first two.
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nation traded for 224
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of meat at
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tripled in 2014 to 663
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and significantly lifted to 1005. The
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2 countries have small numbers compared to others.
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Norway opened with 34
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considerably dropped to 17 in 2016.
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Switzerland transacted for only 23
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in
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decreased to 22
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in 2016.

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