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The maps below show the development of the town of Alexandria between 1967 and 2015.

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The two maps compare the
developed
Replace the word
development
 that had been in Alexandria
town
Use synonyms
 from the year 1967 to 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 the residential
area
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 has
been
Wrong verb form
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changed and the forest
area
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got
Verb problem
has got
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 smaller
by
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over
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 the time period. Starting with the older map,
in
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on
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 the north side of the
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town
Punctuation problem
town,
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 there was a large forest
area
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 where it has cut down most of it and
become
Verb problem
had become
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 smaller. The two houses
where
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apply
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below the forest have been replaced by
industrial
Correct article usage
an industrial
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area
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, and the rest of the houses have been removed and
built
Verb problem
replaced with
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 many apartments
instead
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. In the
center
Change the spelling
centre
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 of the
town
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in
Punctuation problem
, in
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1967
Punctuation problem
1967,
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 there was one road that
has
Wrong verb form
was
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 changed to
highway
Correct article usage
a highway
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 in 2015.
Also
Linking Words
 in the
past
Add a comma
past,
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 there was a huge farmland in the
south west
Correct your spelling
southwest
 of the
town
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 where it begin a very small one. The market and the school have been relocated near
to
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apply
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the residential
area
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the meadow that was in the past were expanded in the second map.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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