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Cooking at home is a waste of time because there are so many convenient fast food options that make life less stressful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nevertheless
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, preparing meals at
home
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 is much healthier, because it is easy to be aware of the freshness of food.
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, cooking at
home
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 enables people to control the quality and quantity of ingredients they consume. On top of that, it helps individuals to reduce the intake of unhealthy substances,
such
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 as too much salt, sugar or saturated fat.
Therefore
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, eating healthy food at
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 guarantees a long term health rather than eating fast
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food.
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 Another important consideration is the financial side of
home
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 cooking.
Although
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 buying a takeaway meal may seem inexpensive,
a general
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 cost can be substantial
who
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for those who
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 eat them regularly. Because
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 it is possible to prepare several portions at
home
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 more economically in comparison with ordering every time. In conclusion,
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 fast food provides convenience, I completely disagree that cooking at
home
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 is a waste of time.

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task response
Score: 6. Your ideas are clear and on topic, but the answer is too short and feels like only part of an essay. Add an introduction with your view, and develop each main point more.
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Give a simple example for each point. For example, say that a home-made meal can use fresh meat and less salt, while fast food may have more fat and sugar.
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Explain the time side of the question more. Say why cooking is still worth the time, or how people can save time by making food for several days.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. The two main paragraphs are easy to follow, but the first body paragraph has many short points about health. Join some of them and explain one point more fully.
coherence and cohesion
The link “Because” should not start a new sentence after “Although...”. Write: “Although buying takeaway food may seem cheap, the total cost can be high for people who eat it often, because they can make several meals at home for less money.”
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear first sentence in each paragraph. For example: “First, home cooking is better for health.” Then explain it and give an example.
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Your view is clear: you disagree. You give two main reasons: health and cost.
coherence and cohesion
The ideas are in a clear order. You use words such as “Additionally”, “On top of that”, “Therefore”, and “In conclusion” to link ideas.
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Your ending clearly repeats your main view and answers the question.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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