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You recently took part in a training course. The organizer of the course has asked you for some feedback. Write a letter to the organizer of the course. In your letter: •Give details of the course you took part in •Say what you found useful on the course •Suggest ways the course could be improved

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Dear Sir, I participated in the Artificial Intelligence as a Tool for Productivity. The office instructed me to write feedback about my experience in the course
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 was approximately 3 days from August 1st to August 4th.
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, the course was made especially for people
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 are not so familiar
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 the term AI
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 a level of information that can increase our productivity.
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 the information
sometimes was
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 too complicated to understand, the staff tried their best to explain every single task.
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, the tasks were very practical in
a way
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terms
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 of adding AI in the
work
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 environment and everyday
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life,
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 as we have the chance to
work
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 remotely.
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, after these 3
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 I feel more prepared to add AI in my
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.
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, a suggestion for improvement
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 could be to understand how AI should
work
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 in a place where everything is made by humans.
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, a lot of workers think that AI makes mistakes in calculations,
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therefore
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people should understand how a machine works and calculates every possible outcome. Thank you for
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 the course. I am looking forward to
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 again. Your sincerely, Ion Sacencu.

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task response
Give a little more detail about the course, such as where it was held and what tools you used. Make your idea for change more clear: ask for a short part on how people can check AI work.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: course, good points, then ideas for change. Use shorter sentences in some places, so the main point is easier to see. Link words such as “also” and “for example” can help.
tone
Keep the polite letter style from start to end. Change “Your sincerely” to “Yours sincerely”, and write “I look forward to joining another course.”
paragraphs
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The long middle paragraph could be split into one paragraph about the staff and one about the useful tasks.
task response
You answer all main parts of the task. You say what course you took, what helped you, and one way it could be better.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow, with clear paragraphs and useful link words such as “Furthermore”, “Consequently”, and “However”.
tone
Your thanks at the end are polite and fit a letter to a course organizer.
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