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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Introduction
World
Web
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Wide Web
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 has made information
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readily
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 accessible to individuals through computers and smartphones across the
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world. The majority of
this
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 knowledge is free. The main benefit is that
people
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 do not have to spend days just
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getting a book because they have to study for a particular subject. The main drawback is that
people
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 are using the internet for everything, and
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making
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is making
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 them a little foolish.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, there are a bunch of positive sides of worldwide knowledge being
that easy to
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 available.
For instance
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, when students are studying for an exam, they do not have to go to the library and wait with 20 other
people
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 for a book, which may not even be useful for them.
Instead
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, they can just
google
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Google
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 any book or report they want, no matter
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what language
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it is
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, and study without any stress. Another advantage of information being
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obtainable is that
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 improves
people
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’s
overlook
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outlook
 so much.
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, if someone is so interested in space, she can just open a documentary movie,
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research
 astronomers or watch a short video about it, and learn many
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 without leaving the house.
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On the other hand
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, there are many negative sides, too.
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, in
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2026,
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 AI apps
such
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 as
chatgpt
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ChatGPT
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 and
gemini
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Gemini
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 are accessible for anyone
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, and
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 nowadays majority of students and even some new teachers are not using researchings of professors from official sites like Cambridge and
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Oxford's
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;
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 they rather use
chatgpt
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ChatGPT
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 to make their work easier and do not
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put
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 any effort
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into
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 their studies.
This
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 is becoming an enormous problem all around the world
starting
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 from the moment when children have access to the internet, like from 6th or 7th grade. They no longer try to learn from books, and
this
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making
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makes
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 them
unclever
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uneducated
 from a very young age.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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 the internet provides
people
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 with easy and often free access to a vast amount of information, it can
also
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 make them overly dependent on technology.
Therefore
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,
people
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 should use online resources wisely and continue to develop their own research and critical-thinking skills.

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task response
You answer both parts of the task: you explain good and bad sides. Your main ideas are clear, but some points need more detail. For example, explain how online facts can help people in small towns, workers, or sick people who cannot go to a library.
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Your examples are useful, especially the student and space examples. However, the AI example is too long and focuses more on AI than on free online knowledge. Keep the link to the main topic clear: easy access to facts can lead to less careful study or false information.
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Avoid very strong claims such as the internet makes people foolish or unclever. Say that some people may become less active in finding, checking, and thinking about information. This is more fair and more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part form: opening, good sides, bad sides, and ending. This makes it easy to follow. Keep this form, but make each body paragraph start with one short, clear main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. You use 'For example' many times. Try other simple links, such as 'Also', 'As a result', 'However', and 'In contrast'. This will make the flow smoother.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are very long and contain many ideas. Break them into two or three short sentences. This will help the reader follow your point, especially in the paragraph about AI.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same key words through the essay. Choose 'information' or 'knowledge' and use them more often than unclear phrases such as 'worldwide knowledge' or 'information being obtainable'.
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You give a balanced answer by discussing both the good and bad sides of free online information.
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The example of students finding books and reports online is clear and closely linked to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The opening states your two main points, and the ending brings the discussion back to careful use of online resources.
coherence and cohesion
Paragraphs are in a logical order, with the good sides first and the bad sides after that.
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