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The chart below illustrates the primary factors influencing students’ decisions to attend a particular university in the UK in the years 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart shows data about the primary factors influencing students' decisions to attend a specific university in the UK in the years 1995 and 2005.Students infleuncement was measured by percentage.
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,one of the main reasons was suitable degree courses, which reached
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a high
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proportion
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 over the years,
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 good sports and social activities
proportion
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 was the least factor by the end of the period given.
On the other hand
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, proportions of factors
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 as
quality
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 of resources, close to parental home and
quality
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 of teaching
excperienced
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experienced
 different trends. At first glance, suitable degree courses
precentages
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percentages
 had been
considerd
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considered
 to overtake
othe
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other
 factors at 35% and about 37% in 1995 and 2005 respectively.
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,students who lived close to
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their parental
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 home
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proportion accounted for the least rate
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accounted for the lowest proportion
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 in 1995
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 it doubled in 2005.
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,
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quality
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the quality
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 of teaching was a significant factor at an average
proportion
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 of 17%. Looking at the chart, good sports and activities
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were
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 the least common factor in 2005 at 5%
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 it decreased compared to its rate in 1995.
Quality
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 of
resourses
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resources
 started at more than 20% and dropped steadily to more than 15% in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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