Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, s1 and s2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan tds

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map shows two places where a new shopping mall could be built. I will
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the information, report the main features and make a comparison between the two sites. The first site where the new shopping mall could be built is
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up north, right next to the railway, below a housing estate and
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close to a river. The location is
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near the city center and to the east of it is a golf course.
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south is the second area where the shopping mall could be built.
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site would still be close to the railway and
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be accessed by road. In
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spot is more isolated since it is close
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the industrial estate and is surrounded by an area where nobody lives. In conclusion, the first spot is very well connected and close to the city center and probably would bring more customers because of its close proximity. The second site,
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, would probably be cheaper to build and the rent would be less since it
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a more rural area.

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