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Many people think that handwriting is less important nowadays because of modern technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

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Introduction
Many
people
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 think that handwriting is less essential because
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 modern technology. Unfortunately, I disagree with
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 statement. I believe that handwriting is important even today in an era of technology. There are many arguments
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Body paragraph 1
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 with, there are many benefits for the children if they learn handwriting well. If they know how to write, it
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people
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, it is very helpful for
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 who do not speak well
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 it provides a different way to communicate with
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people
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Nowadays, many schools and colleges are
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education-based
 on handwriting.
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Bangladesh, Nepal, India and many other countries. So it is very difficult for the students to complete homework, tests and notes.
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, they can face big problems when they try to complete their exams. Most teachers say that if a student
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 their grades.
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their
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 grades
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 not very good.
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 on various circumstances.
Body paragraph 3
It
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 helps
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 different ways.
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, it helps to improve our brain and aids memory. Handwriting is essential for
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improving our memory and cognitive abilities, it is very useful for
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students who need to remember information for
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long periods.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 modern technology is crucial for us,
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it does not make handwriting less important. It has been providing lots of information about ancient cultures

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task response
Explain your view more fully. The question asks how far you agree or disagree, so say clearly that you mostly or fully disagree, then show why modern tools do not replace handwriting in all cases.
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Make each main idea more exact. For example, say that handwriting helps young children learn letters, supports note taking, and is needed in paper exams. Then give one short, real example for each point.
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Some claims need more support. “Many scholars say” and “Most teachers say” are very general. Explain how handwriting can help memory, or give a simple school example instead.
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The last sentence brings in ancient cultures, but this idea is not developed earlier. Either explain it in a body paragraph or remove it and restate your main view.
coherence and cohesion
Use one clear topic sentence at the start of every body paragraph. Then add explanation and an example before moving to the next idea.
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Some links between ideas are not clear. For example, the paragraph about countries, homework, exams, and grades moves quickly. Split it into smaller ideas or explain the link between them.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid using too many linking words only to start sentences. Use clear links inside sentences too, such as “because”, “so”, “therefore”, and “while”.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence form so the meaning stays clear. For example, write “Many schools and colleges in Bangladesh, Nepal, and India still use handwriting for class work and exams.”
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You give a clear view: you do not agree that handwriting is less important. Your main ideas are about children, school work, exams, memory, and communication.
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You use some examples of countries and explain why writing may still be needed in schools.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The order is easy to follow.
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You use linking words such as “To begin with”, “Moreover”, “Additionally”, “For instance”, and “In conclusion”.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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