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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020.

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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of
people
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 living in Iceland between 1990 and 2020.
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People
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 aged 65 and over increased significantly throughout the period and remained the largest group.
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in
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contrast
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people
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 aged 55-64 had one of
lowest
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the lowest
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 figures from the start to
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 of the period.
People
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 aged 25-54 stood at 32% in 1990 and increased slightly to 32% in 2000, the figure
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 reached 39% in 2010 and rose sharply to 49% in 2020. which was the highest figure at
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 of the period The proportion of individuals aged 65 and over stood at 13% and remained relatively stable at around 13% in 2000.
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 group made up 15% in 2010, and it fell slightly to 13 in 2020. The 0-14 age group accounted for about 25% in 1990 and decreased slightly to approxiamtely 23% in 2000
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 After that, it decreased gradually to just under 18% in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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