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Some people believe that studying abroad has many advantages, while others think it has more disadvantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

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Introduction
Nomadays
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Nowadays
,many
people
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 believe that studying abroad
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This
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devlopment
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development
 has both
advantager
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advantages
 and disadvantages.
Body paragraph 1
one
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 important advantage is that
students
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 can improve their English because they use it
evrey
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every
 day at university and with other
people
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.Another benefit is that
students
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 can make new friends from different countries and
spind
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spend
 time together.
Furthermore
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,they learn about
new
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a new
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 culture.
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,
students
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 can learn about new
culture
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cultures
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 and
understanding
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 who
people
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 live in other countries.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
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there
 are
also
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 some disadvantages.One drawback is that
students
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 may miss their
family
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families
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 because they live far away from their parents and friends.Another
disadvantaged
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disadvantage
 is that
students
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 feel lonely because they are in a new country and away from
people
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 they know.
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,some
students
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 have problems with the language when they talk to other
people
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.
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studyinr
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studying
 abroad can be expensive because
students
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 have to pay for their studies and living costs.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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 studying abroad has some disadvantages i believe that it has
moer
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more
 advantages because
students
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 can improve
thier
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their
 English and learn
new
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a new
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 culture.

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Answer both parts in the first paragraph. Say that you will look at the good and bad sides of studying abroad.
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Your main ideas are clear, but add more detail. Explain how daily English use helps students, and how new friends can help them feel at home.
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Use one clear example for each side. For example, a student may get a part-time job to pay for rent, so study abroad can cost a lot.
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Make sure each example fits the point before it. The last example is about money, but it comes after the point about language problems.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: good sides, bad sides, then a final view. Keep this simple plan.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with one main idea, then give two or three linked points about that idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Words such as 'also', 'for example', 'however', and 'because' can make the links clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Use full stops and spaces after commas. This will make your writing easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
In the final paragraph, restate your view in a clear way and do not add a new idea.
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You discuss both the good and bad sides of studying abroad.
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You give useful ideas, such as better English, new friends, new culture, missing family, feeling alone, and high costs.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has clear paragraphs for the good sides, the bad sides, and the final view.
coherence and cohesion
You use helpful link words such as 'Another benefit', 'However', 'In addition', and 'In conclusion'.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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