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Will artificial intelligence improve education?with example and opinion.

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Introduction
Artificial
intelligence
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 is one of
most
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the most
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 modern
technology
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technologies
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 that takes place in
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people life
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people's lives
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 to enhance their efficiency and productivity for
better
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a better
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 life experience.
Specially
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,
education
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.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, artificial
intelligence
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 will show
such
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 improvement in
people
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’s absorption through
classes
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 and that reflect
people
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’s needs for betterment.
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, during
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classes
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 the artificial
intelligence
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increase
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increases
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 the ability to save the information in order to revise it
in
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at
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 any time. So, increase the capability
to
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of
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education
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Body paragraph 2
From my point of view, that should
with
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 some limitations to
minimize
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 the drawbacks
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such
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, such
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 as
eyes
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 strain.
Body paragraph 3
Furthermore
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, artificial
intelligence
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 will show the ability to increase
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people
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people's
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 attention through the
classes
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 by providing some rhythm and smell that connect with
people
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’s
life
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lives
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.
In addition
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, reduce the time required for each
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classes
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class
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My
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 point of view, all these processes require budget management to ensure high efficiency.
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Moreover
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, artificial
intelligence
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 will educate children how to manage their
behaviors
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behaviours
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,
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apply
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 and thinking by using AI
intelligence
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 in order to
settlement
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settle
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 every
issues
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issue
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 that
hold
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holds
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 in their mind. From my point of view, the authorities should
aware
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people about
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of
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 the
using
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use of
 artificial
intelligence
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 in order to
minimize
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 the impact of time consumption.
Body paragraph 5
Therefore
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, the government should take their responsibility to prevent any hacker or
corrupt
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corruption
 that
mislead
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misleads
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people
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people's
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 attention.
Conclusion
In conclusion, artificial
intelligence
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 will reflect
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people
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people's
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 needs through
education
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 and that will improve their
intelligence
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. The
education
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 will rank in high regard among other countries.

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Task response
Give a clear answer in the first paragraph. Say if you think AI will improve education, and say why. Keep this same view in all parts of the essay.
Task response
Develop two main ideas only. For each idea, explain how AI helps students, then give one clear example. Some ideas, such as smell and rhythm, are not well explained.
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Use a real and clear example. For example, an AI app can give a student extra math work after it finds the student’s weak areas.
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Your points about eye strain, cost, safety, and time are useful, but they need clearer links to your main answer. Explain what schools or teachers can do about each problem.
Coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each body paragraph should have one main idea only.
Coherence and cohesion
Make the links between sentences clearer. For example: “First, AI can give each student work at the right level. For example, ... As a result, ...”
Coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat “From my point of view” in every paragraph. State your view in the introduction and use “However” when you add a problem.
Coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because the subject is not clear. Write direct sentences, such as “AI can save class notes, so students can read them again later.”
Task response
You answer the main question and give a clear positive view of AI in education.
Task response
You include more than one possible use of AI, such as saving class information, helping children, and reducing class time.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, several body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as “To begin with”, “Furthermore”, “Moreover”, and “In conclusion” to show the order of your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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