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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.

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Introduction The pie charts illustrate the proportion of native
speakers
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 of
English
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, French, and non-official
languages
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 in Canada across three different years: 1996, 2006, and 2016. Overview
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,
English
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 consistently remained the dominant native language spoken in Canada throughout the 20-year period, despite a steady decline. French
also
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 experienced a slight downward trend,
whereas
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 the proportion of native
speakers
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 of non-official
languages
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 grew steadily. Details
English
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: In 1996,
English
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 was the mother tongue for 60% of the Canadian population.
This
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 figure dropped slightly to 58% in 2006 and continued its downward trend to reach 57% by 2016. French: Native French
speakers
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 constituted the second-largest group in 1996 at 23%. Over the two decades,
this
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 proportion gradually decreased by one percentage point in each ten-year interval, falling to 22% in 2006 and 21% in 2016. Non-Official
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:
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,
speakers
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 of non-official
languages
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 showed a clear increase. Starting as the smallest category at 17% in 1996, its share expanded to 20% in 2006, before rising
further
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 to 22% in 2016—surpassing French by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words speakers, english, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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