The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The given bar graph illustrates the number of
Japanease
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Japanese
who
traveled
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abroad between 1985 and 1995,
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the line graph gives data on the percentage of
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Japaneases
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Japanese
visiting Australia
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.
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, Japanese International travel saw a gradual increase, even though the bar graph shows
irregular
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an irregular
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rise and fall.
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Also
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the percentage of
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Japanese
visiting Australia rose significantly. In 1995, around 5 million
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Japanese
travelled abroad.
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figure gradually rose until 1990, when 11 million
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left Japan to visit other countries. The following year
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number of travellers slightly decreased, to
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rise again steadily until 1995, when it peaked at almost 16 million.
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, the percentage of
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visiting Australia
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drammatically
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increased from 2% to almost 5% in just over 5 years. It
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dropped from almost 5% to just above 4% in 1989.
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, it started rising again, reaching its peak in 1993 at more than 6%. Later, it declined slightly, falling at 6%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japaneases with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • decade
  • fluctuation
  • consistent growth
  • market share
  • peak
  • period
  • significant
  • trend
  • indicate
  • tourism industry
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