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•It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is beer in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays,many
people
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 prefer to live in a
city
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while
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 others think that life is more
confortable
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comfortable
 in the
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counterside
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countryside
.In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 both
side
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sides
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 of the argument have their merits.
Body paragraph 1
Firstily
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Firstly
,live in the
counterside
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 have many
beneficals
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benefits
.
For
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instance
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,
people
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 who intersted with plants and
environment
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the environment
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 can enjoy
their
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them
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.
For example
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,if
a
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an
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 old man
be
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is
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 passionate about growing plants,he will have more space to grow verity of plants in the
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counterside
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countryside
.
In addition
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,
poeple
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people
 who are disturbed by noise will feel relaxed there.
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instance
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,if a woman
want
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wants
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 to sleep,she will feel at ease there.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 who are passionate about animals may find it more enjoyable for them to live in rural areas.
Body paragraph 2
For
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instance
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,a farmer who raises animals may prefer to live in a
arural erea
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rural area
.
Body paragraph 3
On the other hand
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,
people
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 who
enthusiastic
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are enthusiastic
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 about fashion and style may prefer to live in the
city
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.
Body paragraph 4
For
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instance
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,if a girl is
intersted
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interested
 in trends and has
chance
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a chance
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 to choose where she
want
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wants
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 to live,she will definitely choose
live
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to live
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 in the
city
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 because
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city
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the city
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 has a lot of malls and different
typs
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types
 of
modren
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modern
 shops.
Body paragraph 5
Furthermore
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,the
city
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 has many futuristic places and advanced facilities that serve the community,
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such
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 as
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apply
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companies,hospitals,restaurants,and entertainment places.
Also
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,these places help
people
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 who suffer from health
proplems
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problems
.
Conclusion
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,both
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city
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the city
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 and the
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counterside
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countryside
 have their own advantages.In my opinion,the best place to live depends on each person`s
intersted
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interests
 and lifestyle.

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task response
You discuss both places and give your own view. To make your answer stronger, explain each main point more fully. For example, say why quiet country life helps sleep and why city shops and services make daily life easier.
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Your examples are linked to the topic, but some are too short. Use one clear example for each main idea, then explain what it shows. Avoid saying the same point again, such as animals and farming.
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Your view is clear in the last part: the best place depends on a person’s needs and way of life. Add this idea earlier and give a short reason for it.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an ending. Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The point about animals can stay with the country paragraph, without a new short paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a more natural way. You use “For instance” many times. Try words such as “Also”, “As a result”, “However”, and “This means that” when they fit the idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make your sentences join more clearly. For example: “People who enjoy fashion may choose city life because it has more shops and new styles.” This is easier to follow than several short parts.
coherence and cohesion
Check key words so the reader does not lose the meaning. Use “city” and “countryside” in the same way all through the essay, and make sure each example has a clear link to the point before it.
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You answer all parts of the question: you give good points for city life and country life, and you state your own opinion.
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Your ideas are relevant. Quiet, space, animals, shops, hospitals, and fun places are all useful points for this topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because you use a beginning, a country paragraph, a city paragraph, and a final summary.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “On the other hand”, “Furthermore”, and “To sum up” help show the change from one idea to the next.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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