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A friend has moved to your city.Write a letter inviting them to visit you.

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Dear
john
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John
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, I am writing to invite you
in
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to
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 my special outing day to have a nice day and enjoy the views. Please do not forget to bring your latest editor book to my son because he likes your ideas and stories.
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first
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First
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, we will
going
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go
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 to have an enjoyable time in the museum around 9 o’clock
and
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, and
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 we will spend around two hours exploring
fascinating
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the fascinating
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 paintings and art there. Two of our
friend
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friends
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 Friends will guide us through the museum to have
enjoyable
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an enjoyable
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 time there.
Second,
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we will walk for two hours to burn some calories to keep fit,
while
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 we have a good conversation about AI and how the future of the technology will change the world, especially in mobile phones.
Finally
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, we are going to have some rest
in
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at
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 home with a TV show and some nap time.
Then
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 we are going to discuss some
topic
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topics
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 about your editor book and explain to my son your idea about the
last
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 version of
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last
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the last
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 chapter. Let me know if you would like to come and join our special outing day Best wishes, Saif

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task response
Make the invite more clear. Say the day, place, and time, and ask your friend to tell you if they can come.
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Use clear and natural plans. For example, say that you will visit the museum, take a walk, and rest at your home.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each part short and finish each idea before you start a new one. The museum part has a broken line about two friends.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words such as First, Then, After that, and Finally to show the order of the day.
coherence and cohesion
Start names and the first word of each sentence with a capital letter. Write John and First with capital letters.
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You give your friend a warm invite and include several plans for the day.
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The letter has a friendly tone and a clear closing.
coherence and cohesion
The order is easy to follow because you use First, Second, and Finally.
coherence and cohesion
You put the main plans in separate parts, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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