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The map below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today.

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The map below
show
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shows
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 a beachfront
area
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 in Australia in 1950 and today.
Overall
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, the beachfront
area
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 has undergone several significant developments, including the addition
facilities
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of facilities
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 and an extra
park
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. The swimming pool
were
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was
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also
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 enlarged,
while
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 the beach, pavilion, and lighthouse remained unchanged. In 1950, there was
lack
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a lack
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 of facilities for visitors. The are contained a playground in the north of the
area
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,
while
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 a sitting
area
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 and the pavilion
were
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are
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 located in the central part. To the east of the pavilion was a car
park
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.
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, swimming pools were located on
the
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apply
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either
side
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 of the beach,
while
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lighthouse
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a lighthouse
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 stood at the south-east
side
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. Up until now, there
has
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have
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 been significant changes in
this
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area
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. Starting from the north
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side
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side,
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 the car
park
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 has been constructed
which
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, which
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 resulted in the disappearance of the playground
, the
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. The
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 oldest car
park
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 has been relocated to the west
side
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and
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, and
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 a new road has been added
till
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to
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 the south-east
side
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. A restaurant and surf clubs have
also
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 been established on either
side
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 of the beach.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, park, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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