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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart compares the proportion of the
population
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 of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and
predication
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projections
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 for 2050 based on three
age
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 groups.
Overall
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, the
proprotion
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proportion
 of
elderly
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the elderly
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population
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 recorded in Yemen is significantly
low
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lower
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 compared to Italy in both 2000 and 2050.
Conversely
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, the recorded figure for young
people
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 is
less
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lower
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 in Italy. In Yemen, the figure for
people
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 over 60 accounted
only
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for only
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 3.6% in 2000 and is predicted to rise slightly to 5.7%.
Similarly
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,
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population
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the population
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 between the
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age
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ages
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 of 15
to
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and
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 59 holds 46.3% in 2000 and is expected to increase by 11% by 2050.
In contrast
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, the figure of young generation aged 0 to 14 is showing a significant drop from 50.1% to 37% by 2050.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 in Italy, the share accounted by the
people
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 until the
age
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14
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of 14
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,
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apply
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 stood at 14.3% in 2000 and will decline to 11.5% in 2050. The
people
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 aged 15 to 59 years old
shows
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show
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 a similar trend, dropping from 61.6% to 46.2%. There will be a dramatic rise in the percentage of
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population
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the population
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which are
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that is
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 over
age
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 60, 24.1% is reported in 2000 and will rise to 42.3% by 2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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