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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face to face communication is better than the other types of communication,such as letters,e-mail, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Introduction
Nowadays
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people
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 prefer to have a
conversation
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from the
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via
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 letters, emails or telephone calls.
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However
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However,
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 some individuals still want to
communication
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 by person.
This
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 essay will give
reason
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reasons
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 and information to support which method
people
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 like to
conversation
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 to each other.
Body paragraph 1
Many
people
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 want to communicate
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by
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 letter
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due to
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because
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 it is
easy
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an easy
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 way to communicate with other
people
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,
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For
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example
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example,
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 if
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people who
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 stay far away from each other
they
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want to talk, they
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 just write
the
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a
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 letter and send
to
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it to
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people
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those who
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 want to talk.
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, talking
with
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on the
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phone
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 calls some individuals believe that the best method to
communicated
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communicate
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,
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instance
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instance,
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 if some one got accident
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people
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, people
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able
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are able
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 to call
hospital
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the hospital
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 directly
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apply
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also
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.
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,
communication
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in
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via
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 email
still
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is still
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 crucial to some
people
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such
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, such
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 as
who
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those who
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 want to send formal information
also
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 who want to apply for a job.
Body paragraph 2
By contrast
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,
communication
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face
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 to
face
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 some individuals truss
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 extremely important because when
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 are having a
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by
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in
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 person
they
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, they
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able
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are able
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 to the feeling, just as
some one
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someone
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from
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on
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 the
phone
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compare
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compares
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 to talking
by
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in
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person
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person,
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that is
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 so different leads to
soud
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a sound
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phone
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the phone
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 call
just
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that just
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look like
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does
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 not
nice
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sound nice
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but
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 in fact they do not mean
in
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it
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 that way.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
communication
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 is crucial
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, it
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 depends on who prefers to use which method to have a
conversation
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. Also,
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also
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 the best way to talk to each other still deffernt some
people
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 like to have a
conversation
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face
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 to
face
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but
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, but
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 some
people
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 prefer to communicate in
phone
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 calls or emails.

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task response
Give a clear answer in the first part. Say if you agree or disagree that face-to-face talk is better. Your essay now says that all ways are useful, so your main view is not clear.
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Talk more about face-to-face communication because this is the main question. Explain why it may be better, such as seeing body signs, knowing feelings, and getting a fast answer.
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Use each example to prove one main idea. The letter, phone, and email examples show that these ways are useful, but they do not fully answer which way is better.
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Add more clear details. For example, say that a phone call is good in an accident, but face-to-face talk is better for an important work meeting because people can see each other’s faces.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: first part with your view, one body part for your first reason, one body part for your next reason, and a last part that repeats your view.
coherence and cohesion
Make the topic of each body part clear. The first body part is about letters, calls, and email. The next body part is about face-to-face talk. State this clearly at the start of each part.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in each sentence. Some sentences are very long and hard to follow. For example, split the last sentence in the second body part into two or three short sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with a clear job. Use “First” and “Also” to add reasons, “However” to show a different idea, and “Therefore” to show the result.
coherence and cohesion
Make the last part stronger. Do not only say that people have different likes. Clearly say again which method you think is best and why.
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You give examples of letters, phone calls, and email. The example about calling a hospital shows that you can link a communication way to a real need.
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You understand an important point about face-to-face talk: people can know more about another person’s feelings.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a first part, body parts, and a last part. This gives the reader a basic path through your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as “For example,” “In addition,” “Moreover,” and “By contrast.” These help show links between ideas.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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