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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Nowadays, it has become easier to keep up with a fast-paced lifestyle
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 the increasing availability of convenience foods.
Although
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 they are often accessible and affordable, I believe that the health concerns associated with
this
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 type of
food
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 and the low wages paid to employees in
this
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 industry outweigh the advantages.
Body paragraph 1
One major advantage of ready
meals
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 is that it saves people considerable
time
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while
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 remaining affordable and widely available. It is particularly beneficial for individuals with fast-paced lifestyles,
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 as workers and travellers, who may not have enough
time
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 to prepare
meals
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 at home.
Instead
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, they can quickly purchase ready-made
food
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 and use the
time
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 saved for work, travel, or other activities.
Furthermore
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, prepackaged
meals
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 can be cheaper than purchasing fresh ingredients and preparing
meals
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 regularly, particularly when some groceries may expire within a few days.
For instance
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, buying a salad from a restaurant can cost the same as purchasing four or more packets of instant noodles, making the latter a more affordable option for people with limited
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 or budgets.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, the excessive consumption of convenience
food
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 can lead to various health problems. These products often contain preservatives, artificial colours, and inexpensive ingredients that allow them to remain fresh and affordable for longer.
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, consuming them regularly
instead
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 of fresh
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 can negatively affect people's well-being over
time
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.
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, the low prices of these products can
also
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 come at the expense of workers' wages, as manufacturers may employ low-paid workers to keep production costs down and maintain affordable prices.
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, many prepackaged
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 factories in the UAE employ migrants on relatively low wages to produce and export large quantities of goods to other Middle Eastern countries.
Conclusion
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, even though ready
meals
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 are cheaper and easy to attain, I think that the health problems they may cause and the exploitative labour practices in the factories that produce these
meals
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 overshadow the advantages they offer.

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task response
You answer both parts of the task clearly. To make the view stronger, explain more fully why the health and work problems are more serious than the time and cost gains. For example, show how poor health can cause high costs and lost time in the long run.
task response
Your main ideas are clear, but the point about low pay needs more care. It may happen in some places, but it is not true of all ready-meal firms. Use words such as “may” and “in some cases”, and give a clearer link between cheap food and low pay.
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Your examples fit the ideas. The salad and noodles example shows cost well. The UAE example is useful, but it would be stronger if you explained how it proves that low prices depend on low pay.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: an opening, one paragraph on good points, one on bad points, and a short ending. Keep this plan in future work.
coherence and cohesion
Your links between ideas are easy to follow. You use “On the other hand”, “Furthermore”, and “Moreover” well. You could make the first body paragraph smoother by using “These meals are also cheap” before the cost point.
coherence and cohesion
In the last paragraph, the health point and the worker-pay point are both important, but they are quite different. Add a short closing line after the health idea before moving to work, so the change feels less sudden.
task response
You give a clear answer from the start: the bad points are greater than the good points. This view stays the same through the whole essay.
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You cover the key good points of convenience food: it saves time, is easy to get, and can cost less. You also give two clear bad points.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has a clear first sentence, then explanation, then an example. This makes the essay easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
The ending restates your main view and brings the two sides together without adding a new idea.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience foods
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • time-saving
  • variety
  • cost-effective
  • food waste
  • balanced diet
  • healthier choices
  • accessibility
  • ready-to-eat meals
  • processed foods
  • nutritional value
  • consumer preferences
  • meal preparation time
  • busy schedules
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