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You recently stayed with a childhood friend for a few days. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: Thank your friend for letting you stay with them. refer to something enjoyable that you did while staying with him/her invite your friend to visit you

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Dear Karen, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to express my heartfelt gratitude for welcoming me
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 your family so warmly. I want to sincerely thank you for the love, respect, and warmth you showed me during my visit. I am unable to express my feelings and emotions
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 words. The relaxation, kindness, and comfort
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 offered me at that time
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 made me
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 like a part of the family. The moment we visited the countryside
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was unforgettable. We clicked photos, walked through the farms, and enjoyed the stunning natural views. We had so much fun together and created beautiful memories, especially
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 enjoying the delicious street food. Do you remember how we used to plan these
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 of trips ever since our childhood?. It would be a great pleasure to have you here with me. I hope you can visit soon so we can enjoy another beautiful time together. I will be waiting for your response. Warm regards, Sam.

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task response
You cover all parts of the task well. Add a clear time for the visit, such as “next month” or “during the school break,” to make the invite more useful.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: thanks, a happy day, then an invite. Keep each paragraph focused on one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Use a few simple links to make ideas flow, such as “Also,” “After that,” and “Because of this.”
task response
Check small word forms: write “welcoming me into your home,” “you offered,” and “made me feel.”
task response
You thank Karen warmly, share a clear memory of the trip, and invite her to visit you.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing fit a warm letter to a close friend, and the paragraphs are easy to follow.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • warm welcome
  • generous hospitality
  • make me feel at home
  • comfortable stay
  • kindness and support
  • catch up on old times
  • childhood memories
  • look through old photos
  • have a lovely time
  • really enjoyed myself
  • a memorable weekend
  • spend quality time together
  • visit local attractions
  • show you around
  • stay at my place
  • spare room
  • come and visit
  • look forward to seeing you
  • keep in touch
  • best wishes
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