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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Your next door neighbour owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbour requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: – Your reason for writing – What you would like to happen – A nice, respectful style

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Dear
Mr.
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 Hashemi, I am writing to let you know about a serious issue with your
dog
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 that has had a negative impact on my personal and professional life. Unfortunately, your
dog
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 constantly barks throughout the day and the night, which has made it difficult for me to sleep well at night.
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,
this
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 situation has significantly reduced my concentration and productivity at the workplace.
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, my younger child becomes anxious when she hears the
dog
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barking
, and I am so worried about her mental health. I was wondering if you could consider
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 action to address
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 problem.
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, as I have experience in caring for a
dog
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, I would recommend that you take it to a vet to investigate the problem because some diseases can lead to the issue. Thank you very much for your consideration and time. I hope your
dog
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 does not have a serious problem and you can address the issue more efficiently. Yours sincerely, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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task response
State more clearly what you want your neighbour to do, such as seeing a vet, keeping the dog inside at night, or getting help with training.
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Keep the focus on the noise and its effect on your family. The point about your work is clear, but the child’s health point could be shorter and more direct.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: reason, effects, and request. To make it smoother, link the request more directly to the problem with words like “Therefore” or “For this reason”.
coherence and cohesion
The last sentence is a little unclear. You could write: “I hope you can solve this problem soon.” This is simpler and clearer.
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You explain why you are writing, describe the effect of the barking, and politely ask for action.
coherence and cohesion
The letter uses clear paragraphs, and the greeting and closing are suitable for a polite letter to a neighbour.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disrupted
  • challenging
  • appreciate
  • solutions
  • training
  • anti-bark collars
  • excessive barking
  • resources
  • well-being
  • distress
  • amicably
  • cooperation
  • concern
  • neighbourly relations
  • understanding
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