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Social media has become an integral part of daily life for millions of people around the world. While some believe it offers significant benefits for communication and information sharing, others argue that it has several negative impacts on individuals and society. Discuss both the views of social media and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Social
media
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 has become
one
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 of the most
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talked-about
 topics in recent years.
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 some
people
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 think it has many
advantage
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advantages
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 for communication and information sharing,
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apply
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it has a significant impact
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on
people
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 and comunity.
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discuss
 both
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perspectives
 before presenting my own viewpoint.
Body paragraph 1
On the
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 hand, supporters of Social
media
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 say it has many benefits.
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First
, it is
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easy
 to
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communicate
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people
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throy
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through
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meadia
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media
. Now, the world
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has
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 apps to
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communicate
 like
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, Instagram and so on.
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, now all
people
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they
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know about each other
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because of
 the social
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meadia
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media
.
Second,
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people
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 can
learing alot
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learn a lot
 of things by Social
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, if someone
do
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does
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 not know how
cook
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to cook
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 a
pizza
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pizza,
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 just open the youtube he will get many of vidues about it.
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 as, many of Femals learing a new meal
becues
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because of
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meadia
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media
.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 think the
Social
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social media
meadia
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 has
negative
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a negative
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 impact on individuals and society.
The
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one
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 of
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the negative
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majer
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majors
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meadia
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media
 is
spread
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 false news because the social
meadia
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 anyone can
uploading
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 any news he want. To illustrate,
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apply
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one
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years
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 ago I saw a news about the collog it was
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saying
 the first day in semester in 19\12\2025
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 the right information was 15\11\2025
the
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 first day of teaching.
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, the teenager can
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easily
 take some wrong ideas because of social
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meadia
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media
. The
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social media
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 can
any age used it
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be used by people of any age
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. So, they have
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a lot
 of
ides
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ideas
 and we can not
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imagine
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ides
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ideas
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Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe
the Social
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social
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media
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 has many
of
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benefits because a person
used a Social
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spends around 18 hours a day using social media
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media
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 around 18 hours a day, it
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 me for study,
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 information about some coures
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 it meak my life
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easier
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task response
You talk about both sides: good points and bad points. This is good. However, your own view is not clear enough. Say clearly if the good points are greater than the bad points, and explain why.
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Give more full ideas. For example, explain how social media helps people talk to family far away, and how false news can hurt people or make them afraid.
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Some examples are not clear. The school-date example is hard to follow. Use a short, clear example and show why it matters.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end. Keep this plan, but make each paragraph focus on one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to guide the reader: “First,” “Also,” “For example,” “However,” and “In conclusion.” Do not use “Such as” to start a full sentence; use “For example” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Write clearer topic sentences. For example: “Social media makes it easy to stay in touch with other people.” Then add an explanation and one example.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating “social media” too many times in one paragraph. You can use “it” after the first use, when the meaning is clear.
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You answer the main question by showing both the helpful and harmful sides of social media.
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You give useful ideas about talking with others, learning new things, false news, and wrong ideas for young people.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay uses a clear four-part shape: introduction, good side, bad side, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful linking words, such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” “For example,” and “In conclusion.”
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stay in touch
  • instant communication
  • share information
  • access to news
  • educational content
  • online communities
  • promote small businesses
  • reach a wider audience
  • face-to-face interaction
  • excessive screen time
  • reduce productivity
  • unrealistic expectations
  • negative self-image
  • mental well-being
  • spread misinformation
  • reliable sources
  • protect personal privacy
  • use social media responsibly
  • critical thinking
  • set time limits
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