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Writing Samples
Band 4

Write a letter to your neighbor requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: – Your reason for writing – What you would like to happen – A nice, respectful style

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Hello Mr
sharma
Capitalize the proper name
Sharma
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, Hope
this
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 letter finds you well and you are in good health and in high spirits. I am writing
this
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 letter to tell you that something should be done by
our society people
Correct word order
the people of our society
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regarding the street dog shelter. As we
all
Verb problem
are all
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aware
Punctuation problem
aware,
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 there are numerous street dogs roaming outside the house
and
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, and
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 they do not have proper shelter to live and eat. It
was
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apply
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turned out
a
Verb problem
to be a
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noble work if all the society people
arrange
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arranged
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 some money to built small home for these dogs for the
next
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apply
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upcoming
winters
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winter
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.
Furthermore
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, as I know you are a dog lover
person
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apply
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and always believe in charity and volunteer
works
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work
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, I would request you to share your thoughts about
this
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 . Looking forward to hearing
for
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from
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 a positive and prompt response . Best wishes, Navdeep

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task response
Your letter is polite and gives a clear reason for writing. However, the task asks about your neighbor's dog, while your letter is about street dogs. Write about the dog near your home and the problem it causes.
task response
Say clearly what you want your neighbor to do. For example, ask them to keep the dog inside at night, stop it from barking, or clean the area.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Make the link between the dog problem and your request more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each part. First explain the problem, then say how it affects you, and then make your polite request.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words such as 'because', 'also', 'therefore', and 'please' to help the letter flow.
coherence and cohesion
Check a few phrases: write 'As we are all aware', 'build a small home', and 'I look forward to hearing from you'.
task response
You use a kind and respectful tone, especially when you ask for the neighbor's thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
Your greeting and closing are polite, and the letter is easy to follow.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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