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2 The bar chart below shows the production of the world’s oil in OPEC and non-OPEC countries.

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2 The bar chart below shows the production of the world’s oil in OPEC and non-OPEC countries.
The given bar chart illustrates the average amount of the world's oil in
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 and
non-
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OPEC
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countries
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 over a period of 40 years (1980 - 2020)
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the figures show two different trends among
two
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the two
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 trajectories:
while
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non-
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OPEC
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countries
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 displayed a significant upward trend, the figures for
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 Middle East and other
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 members dramatically decreased.
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,
although
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 other
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 members stood at the highest
figure
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 at the beginning,
non-
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OPEC
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recorded
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 the largest production of oil by the end of the period. Regarding the two
countries
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 with the highest oil production at the start, between 1980
to
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and
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 2000, other
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recorded
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 approximately 10, four times the
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 for
non-
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OPEC
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countries
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, at just 2,5. In the following years,
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OPEC
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 surged from 2,5 to 7,5 in 2000-10 and around 16 by the end of the period,
while
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 other
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countries
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 declined to 5 in 2000-10, before dropping to about 1 in 2010-20. Turning to the remaining
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, the
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 for
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middle easr
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Middle East
 has not appeared until 2000-10, after which dipping significantly from about 5 to around 1 in 2010-20

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words opec, non-opec, countries, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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