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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on six consumer goods in 4 countries. Explain in details

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The provided bar graph data indicates the volume of funds where it was allocated
on
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 various retail products in selected states.
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, the most sold item among these four nations was photographic film and toys
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whereas
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,
the
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whereas the
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 least consumed product was personal stereos. It might be mentioned that one of the most beloved things by the locals is photographic film.
In
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average
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average,
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Britain
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 spends
on it
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170,
Germany
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 165, Italy 155 and France 150.
In addition
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, the second most popular product in these regions is toys
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. For
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for
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example
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example,
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 in
Britain
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this
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, this
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 merchandise
bought
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is bought
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 for nearly 167
in
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, in
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 Italy
and
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, and
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 in
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Germany
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Germany,
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this
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 figure is
same
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the same
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157
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, 157
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.
Moreover
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, in
German
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the German
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 market cd’s
also
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has
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have
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 popularity among people in average spending
on it
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of
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 about 157.
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, in
French
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the French
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 and
in
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Italian community another most consumed good is perfumes and tennis racquets
in
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. In
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 France
expenditure
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, expenditure
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 on it is the same as for photographic film
150
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, 150
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 in Italy
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this
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, this
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 figure is reaching 155. It should be highlighted that
,
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 the least popular product in these local markets is personal setereos where
Britain
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 in average expenditure on it 155, in France and in
Germany
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 roughly 157 and in Italy 150.
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Besides
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Besides,
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 among French
consumers
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consumers,
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 the least allocated money is
and cd’s
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on CDs and
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 toys
145
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, 145
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while
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, while
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 in
Britain
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 and
Germany
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is
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, it is
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tennis
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on tennis
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 racquets and perfumes
155
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, 155
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 and 160 in
Germany
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145
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, 145
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 and 147.5
The
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. The
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last
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by
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, among
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 Italian local consumers
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, cd’s
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cd’s
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apply
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spends
in
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an
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 average
150
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of 150
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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