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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
The line graph illustrates average carbon dioxide
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 per person in the United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007, measured in metric
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, carbon dioxide
emissions
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 declined in the United Kingdom and
Sweden
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,
although
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Sweden
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 experienced a substantial fluctuation before ending the period at a much lower level.
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,
emissions
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 in Italy and Portugal increased steadily. Despite its
overall
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 decline, the UK remained the highest emitter throughout the period. In 1967, the UK recorded the highest level of CO2
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, at approximately 11 metric
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 per person, followed by
Sweden
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 at around 9
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. Italy produced considerably less, at roughly 4.5
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,
while
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 Portugal had the lowest figure, at only about 1 tonne per person. Over the following decade,
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's
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 rose to a peak of approximately 10.5
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 in 1977, before falling steadily to around 5.5
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 by 2007. Meanwhile, UK
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 declined gradually from about 11
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 to approximately 9
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 over the period.
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, Italy's figure increased consistently, reaching around 7.5
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 in 1997 and
then
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 remaining relatively stable. Portugal
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 experienced substantial growth, with
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 rising from about 1 tonne in 1967 to approximately 5.5
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 in 1997, after which they remained broadly unchanged until 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • average emissions per person
  • trends
  • reduction
  • increase
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • pivotal years
  • industrial growth
  • policy changes
  • economic changes
  • energy sources
  • technology advancements
  • environmental policies
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