You bought a football match ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: explain the football tournament why you are unable to go how can your friend get the ticket

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Hi Nathan, I hope you are doing great. I am doing well! I am thrilled to share that I have a
ticket
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to the upcoming football match , which I am unable to attend
due to
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my current hectic work schedule. So, I asked
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if you wanted to attend the match. I know you are
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a big Messi fan, yourself. So, it was my best bet to ask you first. Just wanted to let you know that
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the tournament is going to be held at Scotiabank Arena on Friday night at 7:00 PM, and your
ticket
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is in the middle row. I don'
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think I have to give you the details about the tournament itself , as you are already aware of it , but
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booking the
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as you were busy planning your Muskoka trip with your girlfriend. I remember us discussing going to
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football match together , and you had other plans, so I ended up booking just for myself. Just wanted to let you know, before you start thinking about how you are going to pay me. Don'
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worry at all, you don'
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have to pay for the
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. Think of it as your birthday present, in advance.
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, I didn'
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ask in advance to join me because of my ongoing hectic schedule. Take care, Maheep Kaur

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Give a little more about the game, such as the two teams or why it is important. This will make the first point more clear.
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Say clearly how Nathan can get the ticket. For example, say that you will give it to him at work or send it by email.
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Keep the reason for not going simple and in one place: your work is very busy.
coherence and cohesion
Put the ideas in a clear order: the game, why you cannot go, and how your friend can get the ticket.
coherence and cohesion
Some paragraphs repeat the same idea about your busy work and the trip. Remove these parts to make the letter shorter and easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use fewer "Just wanted to let you know" lines. Start with the main point instead.
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You explain that you cannot go because of work, and you give useful details about the time and place.
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The letter has a warm, friendly feel. Offering the ticket as a birthday gift is a kind touch.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly and right for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs make the letter easy to follow, and the key facts are easy to find.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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